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A Summoners demise, a Sons rise., Wiryu Background.
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post Aug 19 2004, 10:38 AM
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Part I
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Wiryu, a young Tarutaru in the region of San'doria, lived with his parents in a remote area inside of South San'doria; By not being a native of san'doria, was often harrassed by the locals and Elvaan natives of san'doria; But he lived a good life. His parents were by no means wealthy, but widely known for their skills in advanced combat. His father Maukeruu, was a Tarutaru summoner whom held command over all of the avatars but one, Fenrir. His mother, Latenna, was a Tarutaru Bard, though she no longer engaged in combat, she took place in small jobs, singing for local pubs and events.

And then there was Wiryu, a young Tarutaru struggling to learn White Magic, though he had not yet matured, he could not harness the full power of Cure spells. One day Wiryu and his family were visited by an Elvaan guard. "Excuse me, you are Maukeruu of windurst are you not?" the elvaan said sturdily. "Formerly of Windurst, but what concern of that is yours sir knight? Have i done something wrong?" Asked Maukeruu. "You've not paid your taxes this month, if you do not pay withing 14 hours, you'll be prosecuted by the king." said the knight. "Thats Ludicrous! you're 12 days early! you can't expect me to rummage up 15,000 Gil in 14 hours!" demanded Maukeruu. "Then you'll be prosecuted if you do not pay! And prosecution by the king means execution, as you become a thief of the kings property! I will return." Said the knight. The knight of San'Doria made his way back to the kingdom, and Maukeruu fell to his knees.

"That poor excuse for a king thinks he can bewilder me because of where i come from?! I'll show him, my family will not be mocked by such a petty being!" said Maukeruu. "The king has been having their way with this family for a long time, perhaps we should just pack up?" asked Latenna. "No, we'll wait here until the king himself tears us of our own home!" said Maukeruu. Maukeruu is a generally kind hearted Tarutaru, but the he had just about finished with the Harrassment of his kind. after hours on end, they waited for the guards return, with no intents of gathering the money 12 days early, 3 hours early of the guards initial demand, he came early. The night was dark, darker than it had been in a long time, and the guard paralell to the door banged on the door. "Open up Maukeruu! your time to pay your tax has come!" shouted the guard. The door opened slowly, Maukeruu was equipped in a battle tunic. "I'll tell you know, and listen good sir knight, i will not pay your tax until everyone else in this city has to!" said Maukeruu.

"Then you and your family are under arrest come with me." said the knight. "Never! we'll not be forced out by you!" said Maukeruu. Wiryu hid in the corner of the hut watching his father argue with the knight of San'doria, Latenna was also huddled with Wiryu, for she knew what happened to those who opposed the knights. "Then you will die." said the knight. The knight started to draw his sword, but just before he put his hand to the hilt, Maukeruu shouted "TITAN!" and Titan rose. By the time the knight drew his sword, Maukeruu had called for titan, and he stood well beyond the houses roof, so he was forced to duck. The knight trembled with fear for a moment, but stopped, and lunged at Titan, but his blade did not pierce Titan. The knights blade was repelled by Titans body. Titan made one strike to the knight and he was crushed. Wiryu and Latenna were frightened, latenna had seen Maukeruus summons fight, but never anything that was not a monster or beastman.

"We have to get out of here, the other knights surely heard that, and when they see this, they'll surely have a warrant out for our arrest." said Maukeruu. "Where can we go? theres no possible way we can out run the guards!" said Latenna. "To Bastok, We'll take chocobos, they are not bound by the gates of san'doria, i pray we make it in time before the guards catch up to us!" said Maukeruu. Maukeruu picked up Wiryu and Maukeruu and Latenna made a run for the Chocobo stables. The guards had not yet caught on to what was happening and they had made it to the stables. During their journey it started to rain hard, but this was only the start of the journey......


End Part I


Well, as it's time i need to go to work now, i'll finish part 2 and 3 later beigebigrazz.gif
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post Aug 19 2004, 12:11 PM
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Nice Start to a story that I know will be good.


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post Aug 19 2004, 08:37 PM
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Part II
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The rain came down hard and beating onto the small Tarutarus heads. They left without a moment to spare, Wiryu road on the chocobo with his father. It was not long before they took a look back and realized they were being chased by five san'dorian guards with a look so fierce the Tarus trembled. "Oh no! this can't be they've caught up to us!" shouted Latenna. "Damn! they're gaining on us! think maukeruu think!" said Maukeruu. They were running short on time, for they had not even gotten out of West Ronfaure. The guards all pulled out a bow and began to fire their arrows. As they dodged the raining arrows, Maukeruu began to slow on his chocobo. "Latenna stop!" shouted Maukeruu. "Leviathan, Serpent of the sea, protect us with your tidal waves!" yelled Maukeruu.

Leviathan was summoned, and started manuvering himself through the guards chocobos. He flung his tail under two guards chocobos and the guards were thrown from their chocobos to the ground, only seconds later he lunged forward into another guard smashing him between a tree and swung his tail to the other hit the other guard. In this time one guard made it through leviathan and dismounted his chocobo, just as he unsheathed his sword to attack Maukeruu, leviathan bit him by his torso and threw him into a tree. "Yes! we did it! that should buy us some time! Wiryu Latenna, let us make leave!" said Maukeruu. Maukeruu looked around to find Wiryu hidden under the chocobo, and to see Latennas chocobo Parked next to a tree, but Latenna was nowhere in sight. "Wiryu....where is your mother?" asked Maukeruu nervously. Wiryu pointed to her chocobo.

At this point maukeruu took a better look, on the other side of the chocobo was Latenna. "Latenna! Latenna are you alright?" asked Maukeruu. "Maukeruu....take Wiryu and go....an arrow pierced my back....i can't make it...." said Latenna faintly. "Latenna.......LATENNA!!!!! ARRRRRRRRRRRRGH!" Maukeruu shouted in an intense amount of agony. He stayed on his knees with his head lowered next to his beloved wife Latenna, due to the rain, Wiryu was uncertain whether his father was shedding tears or not; however fearing delaying would cost him the life of himself and his son, Maukeruu picked up Latenna and sattled her on the back of the chocobo. "Wiryu.." said Maukeruu almost calmly "We need to leave this area immeadietly, i know you're upset, but there is no time for grieving...."

Wiryu stood to his feet and mounted the chocobo with his father, and they made their way to Bastok, the rest of the ride to Bastok was calm, there were no guards in sight. As they arrived in Konscshat, Maukeruu stopped at a Windmill. "Titan!" shouted Maukeruu. Titan looked down at his master with his glowing eyes and awaited a command. "I'd like for you to dig me a hole next to this windmill so that i may bury my beloved wife." said Maukeruu. Wiryu helped his father Maukeruu place Latenna in the hole. "May this be a grave of hope....Titan.....fill in the hole." said Maukeruu. Wiryu could now see with the rain letting up and the sun begining to rise, and as the rain did clear, Wiryu saw it clear as day his father was shedding a tear. They still had a ways to go to Bastok, and their journey was far from over.....


End Part II


Well, thats part 2, Last part coming soon, sorry this is so damn long btw O.o
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post Aug 19 2004, 09:37 PM
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Yu, post it here, too. http://www.geneticrevolution-home.com

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post Aug 20 2004, 12:16 AM
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Only read part one so far, but I like it. Even though it came from you!

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post Sep 6 2004, 02:53 AM
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Wow, thats pretty cool Wir. I have only read part 1 but im fixing to read part 2. After reading the first one here are a few suggestions I have.

You might wanna try mixing up your sentence structures a bit so as to make the lines a bit more captivating. Plus try working wth imagery words and really bring the story to life. Instead of it was a dark night. You could have said the "town was enfulfed by the jet black of night as if it was ink, dripping its darkness on the land." By don't over do it too. I looking foward to reading the 2nd and 3rd one.


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post Sep 6 2004, 02:12 PM
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Heh heh, glad you enjoyed part 1 breaker, i have some HUGE revamping to do on part 1 and 2 anyways. Part 1 was a quick throw together before i went off to ork so i didn't have much time to perfect it. Part 2 is a result of a sleepy wir, and as for part 3, i know what going to happen, i've just been lazy in posting it beigebigrazz.gif
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post Sep 6 2004, 03:26 PM
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QUOTE (Wiruu @ Sep 6 2004, 03:12 PM)
Heh heh, glad you enjoyed part 1 breaker, i have some HUGE revamping to do on part 1 and 2 anyways. Part 1 was a quick throw together before i went off to ork so i didn't have much time to perfect it. Part 2 is a result of a sleepy wir, and as for part 3, i know what going to happen, i've just been lazy in posting it beigebigrazz.gif

Post it already, you lazy bastard!
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post Sep 6 2004, 08:14 PM
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Havn't you only read part 1? read part 2 you lazy bastard ;)


Hmm......i think i want to change part of part 2 as well.......its very....cliche.....
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post Sep 6 2004, 08:35 PM
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QUOTE (Wiruu @ Sep 6 2004, 09:14 PM)
Havn't you only read part 1? read part 2 you lazy bastard ;)


Hmm......i think i want to change part of part 2 as well.......its very....cliche.....

I read part 2, I liked it. I wanna read part 3 already
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post Sep 17 2004, 06:14 AM
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Heh, Just finished part 2. Story seems to be progressing good. and I like the visuals you presented. But pretty much my comments are the same as the first one. Im intruiged as to what lies in fate for Wiryu in Part 3.


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post Sep 17 2004, 04:21 PM
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omg.....i just lost all reason to finish this story........it was 3 times as long as the other two, i was done!!!! i HIT the post button....and its gone.


in order to finish this story, i'm going to wait a few days then i'll re-write part 3
sorry for anyone else who wants to read O.O


In the meantime, if anyone just wants the quick overview as to what happens, send a pm and i'll sned the overview O.o
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post Sep 17 2004, 06:13 PM
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QUOTE (Wiruu @ Sep 17 2004, 05:21 PM)
omg.....i just lost all reason to finish this story........it was 3 times as long as the other two, i was done!!!! i HIT the post button....and its gone.


in order to finish this story, i'm going to wait a few days then i'll re-write part 3
sorry for anyone else who wants to read O.O


In the meantime, if anyone just wants the quick overview as to what happens, send a pm and i'll sned the overview O.o

how long was the post? If you read the RP rules and what not post can be 2 paragraphs max, there is a limit to how much you can post ya know.
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post Sep 18 2004, 12:38 PM
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Post was definetly more than 2 paragraphs long, ah well, i finish later and i guess in more parts than i wanted is all ;)
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post Sep 18 2004, 05:10 PM
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QUOTE (Dorian @ Sep 17 2004, 07:13 PM)
If you read the RP rules and what not post can be 2 paragraphs max, there is a limit to how much you can post ya know.

That's for roleplaying threads that involve mutiple participants, so as not to bog down the narrative. Wiryu's story is more of a fanfiction.

That paragraph rule is old and outdated either way.
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